Date:   10/26/2006 6:52:47 AM ( 19 y ago)
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URL:   https://www.curezone.org/forums/fm.asp?i=760985

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Hi Ana,

First of all Im not that good at critiques, I usually ask others to do so with my writing, but a few things stuck out for me. Note I quickly scanned your letter.

I think you should shorten it, it would make it more powerful if the reader could get the meaning in less time.
Also a lot of the paragraphs start with or end with the word 'volunteering'.

Try to think of synonyms which could be used in exchange.


I feel you are excited about this opportunity. I hope it goes well for you and wish you the best.
 

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